I really like how your poem has a lot of describing it eg "My feet were like springs,as bouncy as a trampoline" I thought that line was amazing. I can imagine how your feeling when you were walking on the moon you felt a bit scared but excited at the same time.
Next time you could maybe decorate the post a bit more by adding pictures,changing the font and changing the color of the font. You could also add a bit more information of how you were walking on the moon.
This reminded me of when I wrote a poem about taking my first step on moon I did my poem in rhyme because I love rhyming even though it is a bit tricky but it's super fun
This is a really nice poem. Mehakpreet has a lot of good points, I agree that you poem makes it really easy to imagine how it feels to bounce on the moon and scary to think about drifting away but you make it sound really peaceful to. A good poem makes you think and feel things and I think you've achieved that here.
I hope you've enjoyed this task and will give some more a go. Looking forward to seeing your next post.
I hope your holidays are going well and you’re having lots of fun. I see you haven't posted on your blog in a while. There’s still plenty of time left to do what you can and get more points and get those cool prizes that are up for grabs.
Remember that you can go back or skip ahead to do the tasks in any order you like so you can always start with the most interesting ones first.
Kia ora Abby,
ReplyDeleteI really like how your poem has a lot of describing it eg "My feet were like springs,as bouncy as a trampoline" I thought that line was amazing. I can imagine how your feeling when you were walking on the moon you felt a bit scared but excited at the same time.
Next time you could maybe decorate the post a bit more by adding pictures,changing the font and changing the color of the font. You could also add a bit more information of how you were walking on the moon.
This reminded me of when I wrote a poem about taking my first step on moon I did my poem in rhyme because I love rhyming even though it is a bit tricky but it's super fun
Keep up the good work
Mehakpreet
Hey Abby,
ReplyDeleteThis is a really nice poem. Mehakpreet has a lot of good points, I agree that you poem makes it really easy to imagine how it feels to bounce on the moon and scary to think about drifting away but you make it sound really peaceful to. A good poem makes you think and feel things and I think you've achieved that here.
I hope you've enjoyed this task and will give some more a go. Looking forward to seeing your next post.
Daniel :D
Hey Abby and Happy New Year!
ReplyDeleteI hope your holidays are going well and you’re having lots of fun. I see you haven't posted on your blog in a while. There’s still plenty of time left to do what you can and get more points and get those cool prizes that are up for grabs.
Remember that you can go back or skip ahead to do the tasks in any order you like so you can always start with the most interesting ones first.
https://sites.google.com/site/summerlearningjourney/weekly-activities/2019-week-1-y3-5
Hope to see you in the comments soon.
Daniel :D